RE:Lightingfeather

Name:Lightningfeather
Age:14 Moons
Gender:She-cat
Pelt:Black pelt with zigzaging lines on her pelt so it looks like lightning. She also has a lightniing strike on her muzzle and she has black paws with with white strikes on them.
Eye colour: Dark blue that look like a birds eye.
Postion:Warrior.
Personatliy: She has a firey temper that comes up unexpected if you make her angry. She has a gentle side and motherly side. She is always playing with the kits. She has a sharp memory and she is a great friend to be with and can always be counted on to bring up jokes and make everyone laugh. She is friends with everyone. She can be a bit harsh but only because of what happened in her past.
http://www.freewebs.com/yourwarrior/Black_cat_by_glowingkitten%5B1%5D.jpg picture.
Histroy: Mom:Bluejay and Dad Emberflight were killed by a monster. Had no siblings.

*Pads out of the den and makes her way to the enterance of the camp. She goes to hunt and comes back with four mice, one blackbird and two shrews. Pads back to camp places her fresh kills on the pile and pads of to nuresery. Finds some kits and starts to play with them.*" Lightningflight? Show us the hunters crouch please??!!" the kits beg."Ok" she agrees. She drops to the hunter crouch and slide smoothly across the ground. The kits try to copy her but end up makeing her purr with amusement. "What wrong with our crouch?" they ask indignalty.*She shakes her head and is about to show them when she hears Phoenixflight calling for her and turns to the kits."Sorry guys have to go!" she mewos to her friends.[left]

ats all fine but i would prefer it if you roleplayed sorta like ur writing a book (xD) go see Hollykits application form for an example